indignation
I feel indignation
because of the way media sexualizes and standardizes the woman’s body. Since the
very beginning, the figure of the woman on movies, for example, has just been
used to inspire sexual desire and to make real woman want to look like the
characters they see on screen.
That hasn´t changed that much in the actual
time. Nowadays, young woman stop eating or adopt eating disorders because they
want to look like the girls they see on TV, on movies or in the magazines. That´s
why, I think, unbalanced diets has became so popular, and some of them tell you
to eat just apples and nothing more. That’s really unhealthy and dangerous to
any person, and most of all, to a girl who is influenced by those stereotypes.
The media
tell woman, not just how they should look, but also how they should behave. Things
that a “lady” should or shouldn’t do. How a “lady” should talk, which words
should she use, how they should dress, how they should walk or eat or what they
should eat, etcetera. And I think that this is very dangerous to our society,
because of the men who take advantage on that, they sexualizes us on the
street, they yell things to us while we’re walking, they feel with the faculty
to touch us without our consent, to beat us and to kill us… I think we should
stop living wanting to be someone we are not and stop living with fear.


This is so sad and real, it's so difficult to end with stereotypes, but at least I have faith in our generation to make this change
ResponderEliminarAs future communicators we should reverse this situation!
ResponderEliminarStereotypes surround us, it's terrible!
ResponderEliminarThe text is greatly coherent, the use of cohesive devices is adqueate and the structuring is smooth and logical. Very few mistakes do not deter message coming through.
ResponderEliminarCorrections:
the actual time= THE PRESENT TIME
young woman stop= YOUN WOMEN
unbalanced diets has became= HAVE BECOME
The media tell woman= WOMEN
how they should look= LOOK LIKE
they sexualizes us on the street= SEXUALIZE US
T: 3, L; 3, G: 2,5= 8,5 pts
Grade: 6,7